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Section 6.7

Stringy Sentences

Avoid stringing several clauses that would be easier to read andunderstand if they were broken up into separate clauses.


Weak

We must accept the facts and our enormous energy requirements, but it is also importantnot to forget that attempts to economize on safety provisions in such hazardous industries result inincreased risk, and these increased risks may result in terrible tragedy, even in disasters whoseconsequences exceed national boundaries, although it is certainly true that a nuclear power stationworking safely, without accident, is ecologically one of the cleanest of all industrial plants.

Improved

We must accept the facts and our enormous energy requirements, but it is also importantnot to forget that attempts to economize on safety provisions in such hazardous industries result inincreased risk. And these increased risks may result in terrible tragedy, even in disasters whoseconsequences exceed national boundaries. It is certainly true, however, that a nuclear power stationworking safely, without accident, is ecologically one of the cleanest of all industrial plants.

--V. M. Chernousenko, Chernobyl (modified)


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